Fighting with my Blurb

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I hate writing blurbs. I have to compress a story I’ve worked on for months into a hundred and fifty words. I want to intrigue the reader, but I can’t reveal juicy plot twists . Uurgh!


I’d love help with this one. It’s for my novella, Lovin’ Danger, which launches in early September.

I’ve pasted the text below. I would really appreciate feedback. I’ve worked on it for a couple of weeks (with the help of three awesome critique partners) and I still don’t think I have it right.

What do you think?

You can comment below or email me privately ( Thanks.


Lovin’ Danger

A single woman – A protective man

          Sadie Stewart, international model by day, CIA operative by night, struggles to balance her double life. She wants it all: the danger and intrigue of being a spy, the glamour of modeling on the international stage and the love of a good man. But after she survives the second assassination attempt on her life, her world spins out of control.

Art dealer, Sebastian Wilde, a Viking with cool blue eyes and the body of a Norse God, wants Sadie safe and by his side.  Her boss, the infamous master-spy, Jeremiah Cole, demands she follows his orders.

But they both should know better. Sadie is a bad-ass spy who won’t be held back by any man.

Facing  the assassin alone, she risks everything.

Smart, Sexy Suspense

Mata Hari Series #4 – a Novella


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Author: Jo-Ann Carson

Jo-Ann Carson writes a saucy mix of fantasy, adventure and romance. Her latest stories are in the Gambling Ghosts Series: A Highland Ghost for Christmas, A Viking Ghost for Valentine’s Day, Confessions of a Pirate Ghost and The Biker Ghost Meets his Match. An anthology of the novellas will be coming out this summer. Currently she is working on Midnight Magic, A Ghost & Abby Mystery, the first book in a spin-off series from her Viking ghost story. Jo-Ann loves watching sunrises, playing Mah Jong and drinking good coffee. You can chat with her on social media: You can find all her links on her website -

13 thoughts on “Fighting with my Blurb”

  1. Love everything! Might suggest a tiny change: instead of “Her boss…”, perhaps something such as, “And Sadie’s boss….” Reason: I had to restart the sentence and it gave a hiccup to my reading flow and understanding. Think I got distracted by the Viking!

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  2. How about leaving out part of the first line and jumping to the second, i.e. ‘Sadie Stewart wants it all: the danger and intrigue of being a spy for the CIA, the glamour of modeling on the international stage
    and the love of a good man.’ My reasoning is that the second line repeats the information given in the first line. I know that leaves out that lovely phrase about her double life, but I think it makes it
    tighter. Just my opinion. I think the blurb is good as it is too.

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    1. Hi Helena
      I like that. It sounds stronger. I think I may be too attached to the word double:)
      Thanks for stopping by and helping me out.
      my best to you


  3. OK, sign me up for a copy NOW! And I actually like the blurb just as it is. If I did anything to change it I would remove the last line and leave us with Sadie, the bad ass spy who won’t be held back by any man.

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    1. Aaah Pat
      that’s just the reaction I want readers to have. You make a good point. I’m going to think on that one.
      Thanks so much for stopping by and looking at my blurb again.
      my best


  4. Hey, Jo-Ann. IMHO LOL I don’t like Sadie’s description as a “bad-ass spy.” That just doesn’t seem to describe her. She’s smart and will do about anything to get the job done, but “bas” doesn’t do it for me. I agree with combining the first two sentences. And agree. Blurbs are the pits. Sometimes having someone else write it for you helps. We’re too tied to all our lovely words and story angles. I know you’ll get it just right!

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    1. Thanks Marsha. Has worried me. I like to keep my usage currant but you’re right it misses her. Thanks so much for your feedback.



      Who is heading to the ocean for a swim. We have another heat wave but they say it will only last two days this time.

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      From:”Jo-Ann Carson” Date:Sat, 18 Jul, 2015 at 2:58 pm Subject:[Jo-Ann Carson] Comment: “Fighting with my Blurb”


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